Don't be too original.
You still want this to have a chance of being published, right?
What? I thought... You just said I wasn't being original enough!
You were literally copying off a children's rhyme. This... this is more like a serial killer trying to write the Next Great American Novel.
In that case, what advice do you have, oh Grandmaster Poet Laureate and Not-A-Serial-Killer?
There's no need to take that tone with me.